Originally Posted by David Callin
I've seen yours before, here, Joe. Is it much changed from what it was? Or not at all?
My “Apocalypse Now” poem has changed a fair bit since I put it up for criticism here a few weeks ago. The consensus then was that poem was playing too much with surface references to the film and not saying very much new or original. Which was a little dispiriting but undeniably accurate.
However, I did very much enjoy playing with the references, images and quotes and trying to weave them into a villanelle that encapsulated my experience of the film. So I decided to make a virtue out of superficiality and crammed in even more of them.
But I did take on board several comments that people made. The Snakeskin version now stands back a bit more and looks at how we, the audience, have reacted to the movie as a spectacle.
When Snakeskin said they were having a special issue called "Breathe", it seemed to fit the rubric.
Is it any better? (You don't have to answer that!)