Bill,
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To be honest, the only 'count' my poems ever submit to is the number of syllables to a line.
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Ah, yes, that would explain my sense of there being
some underlying order in the poem as a whole. And yet it is a very unsatisfying sort of order. Why would you submit any of your poems to a syllable count when a syllabic pattern without an accentual one doesn't render compelling results in English?
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That statement alone should only allow me out to roam the Free Verse yard for a small portion of any day and then be rushed back in to re-join the general population.
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Hee-hee--oh, my.
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You say the last two lines 'want' to be anapestic trimeter because the first two have established a precedent.
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I actually said it seems they "want" to be anapestic
tetrameter. That's why I mentioned that bringing them into this meter would give you a bit of extra space to work with. By suggesting that you embrace this possible ghost blueprint, I was casting a vote for the idea that making the whole poem anapestic trimeter would not be the only way to bring it into full formal graces. I think the flow of two lines of anapestic tri followed by two of anapestic tet, though heterometric, would flow quite nicely and sound quite deliberate. However, I would not say the same about making the last two lines anapestic pentameter.
The change from "and" to "how" makes an interesting difference. I'm glad you like my comma suggestions, although I see that Nemo preferred the more self-guided experience.