Originally Posted by Bill Marsh
2. Sarah-Jane, the speaker in the poem is a jerk. He is just like Adam except his sexism and demonization are domesticated.
Phew, that's what I read, but you might want to make a contemporary nastiness much clearer somewhere very early on. Also be wary, because in L8-10 you bring us all in to empathise with the N - readers might be more alert to having crap bosses than anything more subtle. The domestic details are a hook, but I'm not sure it's working for you in the way you want it to in this context.