[Rick Mullin]

Thanks Carl and Julie,

I'm good with "enter to" and the lacking comma in stanza 3.

I guess I've been aware all along that the third stanza has a certain jerkoff element to it. I've rewritten the first line, which, along with eliminating the finally-irksome "knowledge", gets rid of the condescending element of saying things "must" do so-and-so. It just has them doing it. Anything on whaddya think appreciated.

Thanks,
Rick

[Alexandra Baez]

I like "dissolve in a certain texture." It's more distinctive, specific, and heartfelt-feeling than "must pass to a certain knowledge," and it follows really well on all the preceding texture. And yes, it's nice to shed that "must"--it, too, dissolves here in a certain texture, which somehow in its less-ness than knowledge feels like more. It's more humble but also more fundamental.

[Rick Mullin]

Thanks for spending time with this one, Alexandra. I'm glad you like the change to that first line of stanza three.

Rick