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Unread 11-04-2022, 09:20 AM
Carl Copeland Carl Copeland is online now
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I’d love to know what people think of this poem, published in The Iowa Review (Spring 2006). It’s not really my thing, but the poet, Stephanie Ivanoff, was a high school friend of mine—a wonderful actress, who later, after we lost contact, became an English teacher and poet. I got in touch with her sister a few years ago, but have so far failed to reach her.


STEPHANIE IVANOFF

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(after “Il Penseroso,” by Milton)


A mood of oyster
Conspires in an oyster bed,

A mood of lead,
Even as these, newly-wed,

Lean stone sober
Over the wall-eyed cake,

Even as the seagulls pizzle
On the Cadillac

Parked at the shore
Where the brochure promised a pearl

From the sea’s fields
Of planted oysters.

And, like the hinged oyster shell,

A jimmied lip
Lets slip the unhinged, eros,

From its bitter pith and armor

And undresses in the gray-violet dark

For the calf-eyed bride
Till she founders in salt

Under its back.

She wants to say something back
But lags at the effort

To trick herself out,
Like swimming in dark water

In the dark and oyster scent,
Even if the ill-favored

Rough and cobbled oyster
Guarantees its tourists’ preserve:

A little pill
Parked on each leaden tongue,

A souvenir
Of this watery farm.

Some piscean wizard
Must be responsible,

Muzzled in rubber
And smitten

With other landscapes
All apocryphal,

Cultured and tired.

These are not real pearls
And we are perishing of it,

Even as the limp waves limp to the shore
Above our bony oyster beds,

And the temperatures run to despair.
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Unread 11-04-2022, 11:14 AM
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I think it's really good. It reeks of sex and disappointment. Many startling, intriguing images that I look forward to coming back to.
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