Oh, wow! I'm not getting notified of responses to this. My apologies for the late responses to your crits.
Jan: Thanks so much for stopping in. I'm glad you found something to like in this.
Jim: Thank you. I wonder about the title as well. I'll keep thinking on it. I'm terrible at titles. I think the "you" might be cocaine herself, but I'm not sure, either.
Hilary: Thanks for reading and responding. You're right about the "curse and cure" line. I'm going to have to revisit that. Thanks!
Matt: Thanks for your useful suggestions. That "white-knuckled" line is problematic, and I'll have to attend to that in revision. Thanks for your generous read and comments.
Rob: Great thoughts on this! Much appreciated. I'll think on the "grin/thin" rhyme. Thanks so much!
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