[Carol Taylor]

1..2..3

[David Anthony]

I love this, Carol:
sparse, spare; somehow inevitable in its progression, and the title says it all.
You should ask yourself, though: are the second and fourth periods really necessary?
Good luck with it as you revise.
Bastard to post to this forum, by the way.
Best wishes,
David

[Carol Taylor]

Thanks, David. Actually I was thinking I was two periods short and should add one more between each number in the sequence.

Do you think perhaps I should have posted it in Mastery instead?

Carol

[Janet Kenny]

Carol
I think this belongs in the "Death of the Author" thread.
Janet

[Kate Benedict]

It's very elliptical. Lick that stamp and send it to Fence.

[FOsen]

Carol, David, Janet, Kate:

LOL - I mean, L . . O . . L . .

Frank



[This message has been edited by FOsen (edited May 30, 2004).]

[Mark Allinson]

Let them laugh, Carol.

I count this a shrewd poem, guaranteed to be heard at all the best readings.

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Mark Allinson

[This message has been edited by Mark Allinson (edited June 09, 2004).]

[Wild Bill]

Shrewd indeed. You get a royalty check everytime a mike gets set up. Think of Madonna's Re-invention tour alone...The mind boggles.

Welcome back!

[Tim Murphy]

Reminds me of the shortest poem I ever saw in Light:

Dust

I must.

[Bruce McBirney]

Carol, if you heed David's suggestion about dropping one or two periods, you should be able bring this in with fewer keystrokes than Aram Saroyan's one word poem "lighght". (That was the whole poem: lighght.)

Saroyan's poem supposedly got some kind of NEA grant--$1,500 I think, but that was quite a few years ago. What with inflation, as well as the superior pacing of your poem, yours has to be worth much more. Tell Dana Gioia to get his checkbook out!