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Unread 04-19-2025, 08:06 PM
Yves S L Yves S L is offline
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Here is another angle: what concrete situations within what family dynamics creates a drama over what period of time given what personality to create a N talking like this? For the poem to make sense the reader will have to somehow extrapolate/interpolate that information. Forget for a moment what academic associative games with Christian theology or whatnot are being played, but focus on the living realities of families, and consider the following passage:

Of course they're cursed.
Through them, you're vulnerable. For them to thrive,
you must be sapped, and what is yours, disbursed
to fund their journey, so they may arrive.

It reads to me like a spectacularly syntactically ornate gripe! Sure, one takes what persona the poet wants to present at face value, as an opening gambit one accepts, and that includes the speech patterns of the N, but my main feeling is this syntax is the result of having to get the rhymes at the end of the lines.

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