Thanks, folks! I appreciate the feedback. I switched out distillation for yellow flow and gas station for gas hose, both of which should make the metaphor clearer, though I’m hoping to find a better adj than yellow.
Coming back later…changed yellow to citric.
…and changed like to of before battery acid so I don’t have three similes on one poem.
Last edited by Tony Barnstone; 12-17-2023 at 02:19 AM.
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