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Unread 10-16-2024, 02:06 PM
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Default Pushkin, “Autumn” (1833)

Recently several people expressed an interest in this poem, but I held off until the season was right. The translation has been published, but I’ve since trimmed it from hexameter to pentameter to eliminate filler, so I don’t think I’m cheating by posting it here.


                    Autumn
                 (A Fragment)


And what then doesn’t come into my drowsing mind?
                                                   —Gavrila Derzhavin

                         I

October’s here. The grove shakes off the traces
of leaves that cling to naked branches still.
Though autumn’s breath has chilled the road and glazes
the pond, the brook still babbles by the mill.
My neighbor, with his hunting party, chases
wild game with gusto in his fields until
the winter corn is trampled by their larking,
and dogs awake the sleeping woods with barking.

                         II

This time is mine. The spring I can’t abide:
the thaw, the stench, the mud—spring makes me queasy.
The blood is restless. Yearning grips the mind.
The winter, so austere, has more to please me:
I love its snows. You share a moonlit ride
with your amie, the sleigh sweeps free and easy
and, flushed beneath her sable in the chill,
she clasps your hand, atremble with the thrill!

                         III

What fun then, shod with iron, to go gliding
on rivers still and smooth as glass below!
And aren’t the brilliant holidays exciting!
But there’s a limit: half a year of snow
will try the patience of a bear residing
inside his den. We can’t forever go
on sleighing with enchantresses or lazing
morosely by the stove behind the double glazing.

                         IV

Ah, summer fair, I’d love you were it not
for heat, dust, flies, mosquitoes that beset us.
You sap our mental powers. Parched and hot,
we suffer like the fields. As you torment us,
refreshment’s all that occupies our thought.
Old lady winter’s missed, a fond remembrance;
we saw her off with wine and pancakes and partake
of mounds of ice and ice cream at her wake.

                         V

Though many judge late autumn days severely,
for me, dear reader, autumn is aglow
with beauty meekly, splendidly endearing.
I’m drawn as to a child whose family show
her no affection. She—I speak sincerely—
alone of all the seasons cheers me so.
She has much good in her. No strutting lover,
I have a dream all mine that makes me love her.

                         VI

How can I put it best? She charms me, friend,
as a consumptive girl whose days are waning
charms you perhaps. Poor soul, to death condemned,
she bows without a murmur, uncomplaining.
Her withered lips still smile, and to the end
her face reveals a play of crimson shading.
She doesn’t feel the grave’s black chasm yawn.
Alive today, tomorrow she’ll be gone.

                         VII

O somber time! Enchanting to the senses!
My eyes drink in your parting loveliness:
the lavish withering of nature, the excesses
of forests decked in gold and crimson dress,
their rustling canopies and breath of freshness,
the undulating haze, the rare caress
of sun upon my face, the frost’s first kisses
and hoary winter’s menace in the distance.

                         VIII

Each year I bloom anew in autumn’s rays,
and for my health the Russian cold’s a wonder.
I relish once again the round of days:
sleep finds its time, and so, in turn, does hunger.
The blood runs, light and joyous, in my veins.
Desires well up. Once more I’m happy, younger
and full of life. It’s just my organism
(you’ll pardon an inapt prosaicism).

                         IX

They bring my horse, and in the wide expanses,
with tossing mane, he bears me over ground
that rings beneath each glinting hoof that passes
as crackling ice and all the vale resound.
The day is short. A fire already dances
in its forgotten hearth. It flares, dies down
and slowly smolders as I read beside it
or fall to thinking lengthy thoughts in quiet.

                         X

The world recedes, and in sweet reverie,
I’m sweetly lulled by my imagination,
and I feel poetry awakening in me:
My heart is gripped by lyric excitation.
It throbs and, as in sleep, it seeks a free
release for its intense reverberation.
I’m visited by swarms of guests unseen,
old friends of mine, the offspring of a dream.

                         XI

My head’s awhirl with notions bold, exciting,
and rhymes run forth to meet them, row on row.
my fingers seek a pen, the pen a sheet for writing.
A minute more, and verses freely flow.
Just so, a ship at anchor drowses lightly,
when—listen!—sailors scramble to and fro,
aloft, below; the sails take wind and flutter;
the vessel puts to sea and cleaves the water.

                         XII

She’s off. Where shall we sail? . . . .
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
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                    Autumn
                 (A Fragment)


What doesn’t come then into my drowsing mind?
                                                  —Derzhavin

                         I

October has already arrived; the grove is already shaking off
the last leaves from its naked branches.
Autumn cold has breathed; the road freezes.
Babbling, the brook still runs past the mill,
but the pond has already frozen over; my neighbor hastens
to outlying fields with his hunting (party),
and the winter crops suffer from the frenzied larking,
and the barking of dogs wakes the sleeping (oak) woods.

                         II

Now is my time: I dislike spring;
the thaw is dreary for me; the stench, the mud—I’m sick with spring;
the blood is restless (in ferment); the feelings, mind are gripped by yearning.
I’m more pleased by harsh winter;
I love its snows—in the moon’s presence,
how fast and free the light career of a sleigh with a girlfriend is
when, under a sable, warmed up and fresh,
she squeezes your hand, flushed and trembling!

                         III

What fun, feet shod with sharp iron,
to glide along the mirror of still, smooth rivers!
And the brilliant excitement of the winter holidays?...
But you have to know when enough is enough; snow and snow for half a year—
even the resident of a den, a bear, will finally
get fed up by this. We can’t forever
ride in sleighs with young Armidas
or mope by stoves behind double glazing.

                         IV

Ah, summer fair, I would love you
if not for the heat and dust and mosquitoes and flies.
You, destroying all our mental powers,
torment us; like the fields, we suffer from drought;
how to drink our fill and refresh ourselves—
we have no other thought, and it’s a pity about old lady winter,
and, having seen her off with crepes and wine,
we hold a wake for her with ice cream and ice.

                         V

Autumn’s late days are usually berated,
but she (autumn) is dear to me, dear reader,
for her quiet beauty, shining meekly.
I’m drawn in this way to a child unloved
in her own family. To tell you sincerely,
of the seasons, she alone gladdens me,
there’s much good in her; not a conceited lover,
I’ve found in her something of a capricious dream.

                         VI

How (can I) explain this? She pleases me
as a consumptive girl probably
pleases you at times. Condemned to death,
the poor thing bows (yields) without a murmur, without anger.
A smile is visible on her withered lips;
she doesn’t sense (hear) the yawning of the grave’s abyss;
A crimson tint still plays on her face.
She’s still alive today—tomorrow, not.

                         VII

Somber time! Enchantment of the eyes!
Your parting beauty is pleasant to me;
I love the lavish withering of nature,
forests dressed in crimson and gold,
the sound of the wind in their canopies and fresh breath,
and skies covered with wavy haze,
and the rare ray of sun, and the first frosts,
and the distant threats of hoary winter.

                         VIII

And each autumn I bloom anew;
the Russian cold is good for my health;
Again I feel love for the ways of everyday life:
Sleep alights in its turn, in turn hunger comes on;
the blood plays freely and joyously in the heart,
desires surge (boil)—again I’m happy, young,
again I’m full of life—such is my organism
(kindly forgive me a needless prosaicism).

                         IX

They bring my horse; in the open expanse,
tossing his mane, he carries his rider,
and, beneath his glistening hoof,
the frozen vale rings out and the ice crackles.
But the short day is dying down, and in the forgotten fireplace,
a fire is again burning—now it shines with a bright light,
now smolders slowly—and I read in front of it
or entertain lengthy thoughts in my soul/heart.

                         X

And I forget the world, and in the sweet hush
I’m sweetly lulled by my imagination,
and poetry awakens in me:
the soul/heart is gripped by lyric excitation,
it throbs and sounds and seeks, as in sleep,
to pour itself out at last as a free manifestation—
and here an unseen swarm of guests come to me,
old acquaintances, the fruits of my dream.

                         XI

And thoughts in my head whirl in boldness,
and light rhymes run to meet them,
and fingers seek a pen, the pen [seeks] paper,
a minute, and verses will freely flow.
Just so, a ship drowses motionless in motionless water,
when, hark!—sailors suddenly dash about, climb
aloft, below—and the sails have filled full of wind;
the hulk has gotten under way and cleaves the waves.

                         XII

She’s under sail. Where shall we sail? . . . .
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                    Осень
                 (Отрывок)


Чего в мой дремлющий тогда не входит ум?
                                                  Державн.

                         I

Октябрь уж наступил — уж роща отряхает
Последние листы с нагих своих ветвей;
Дохнул осенний хлад — дорога промерзает.
Журча ещё бежит за мельницу ручей,
Но пруд уже застыл; сосед мой поспешает
В отъезжие поля с охотою своей,
И страждут озими от бешеной забавы,
И будит лай собак уснувшие дубравы.

                         II

Теперь моя пора: я не люблю весны;
Скучна мне оттепель; вонь, грязь — весной я болен;
Кровь бродит; чувства, ум тоскою стеснены.
Суровою зимой я более доволен,
Люблю её снега; в присутствии луны
Как лёгкий бег саней с подругой быстр и волен,
Когда под соболем, согрета и свежа,
Она вам руку жмёт, пылая и дрожа!

                         III

Как весело, обув железом острым ноги,
Скользить по зеркалу стоячих, ровных рек!
А зимних праздников блестящие тревоги?..
Но надо знать и честь; полгода снег да снег,
Ведь это наконец и жителю берлоги,
Медведю, надоест. Нельзя же целый век
Кататься нам в санях с Армидами младыми
Иль киснуть у печей за стёклами двойными.

                         IV

Ох, лето красное! любил бы я тебя,
Когда б не зной, да пыль, да комары, да мухи.
Ты, все душевные способности губя,
Нас мучишь; как поля, мы страждем от засухи;
Лишь как бы напоить, да освежить себя —
Иной в нас мысли нет, и жаль зимы старухи,
И, проводив её блинами и вином,
Поминки ей творим мороженым и льдом.

                         V

Дни поздней осени бранят обыкновенно,
Но мне она мила, читатель дорогой,
Красою тихою, блистающей смиренно.
Так нелюбимое дитя в семье родной
К себе меня влечёт. Сказать вам откровенно,
Из годовых времён я рад лишь ей одной,
В ней много доброго; любовник не тщеславный,
Я нечто в ней нашёл мечтою своенравной.

                         VI

Как это объяснить? Мне нравится она,
Как, вероятно, вам чахоточная дева
Порою нравится. На смерть осуждена,
Бедняжка клонится без ропота, без гнева.
Улыбка на устах увянувших видна;
Могильной пропасти она не слышит зева;
Играет на лице ещё багровый цвет.
Она жива ещё сегодня, завтра нет.

                         VII

Унылая пора! очей очарованье!
Приятна мне твоя прощальная краса —
Люблю я пышное природы увяданье,
В багрец и в золото одетые леса,
В их сенях ветра шум и свежее дыханье,
И мглой волнистою покрыты небеса,
И редкий солнца луч, и первые морозы,
И отдалённые седой зимы угрозы.

                         VIII

И с каждой осенью я расцветаю вновь;
Здоровью моему полезен русской холод;
К привычкам бытия вновь чувствую любовь:
Чредой слетает сон, чредой находит голод;
Легко и радостно играет в сердце кровь,
Желания кипят — я снова счастлив, молод,
Я снова жизни полн — таков мой организм
(Извольте мне простить ненужный прозаизм).

                         IX

Ведут ко мне коня; в раздолии открытом,
Махая гривою, он всадника несёт,
И звонко под его блистающим копытом
Звенит промёрзлый дол и трескается лёд.
Но гаснет краткий день, и в камельке забытом
Огонь опять горит — то яркий свет лиёт,
То тлеет медленно — а я пред ним читаю
Иль думы долгие в душе моей питаю.

                         X

И забываю мир — и в сладкой тишине
Я сладко усыплён моим воображеньем,
И пробуждается поэзия во мне:
Душа стесняется лирическим волненьем,
Трепещет и звучит, и ищет, как во сне,
Излиться наконец свободным проявленьем —
И тут ко мне идёт незримый рой гостей,
Знакомцы давние, плоды мечты моей.

                         XI

И мысли в голове волнуются в отваге,
И рифмы лёгкие навстречу им бегут,
И пальцы просятся к перу, перо к бумаге,
Минута — и стихи свободно потекут.
Так дремлет недвижим корабль в недвижной влаге,
Но чу! — матросы вдруг кидаются, ползут
Вверх, вниз — и паруса надулись, ветра полны;
Громада двинулась и рассекает волны.

                         XII

Плывёт. Куда ж нам плыть? . . . .
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

Last edited by Carl Copeland; 10-16-2024 at 02:26 PM.
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Hi, Carl

Beautiful job! I remember you commenting that autumn was Pushkin’s favorite season. Now I understand why. This piece is written in what seems to me to be a friendly, casual, dishabille tone, while at the same time observing strict metrical requirements.

I had difficulty understanding exactly what was happening in S3. Is the “sharp iron” referring to cleated horseshoes that are put on the horses pulling a sleigh? At first I thought it was some kind of snowshoe with iron studs that the poet was wearing. This seems to be something that Pushkin would assume his reader was familiar with.

The comparison of autumn to a beautiful woman dying of tuberculosis is such a perfect example of Romantic melancholy. It strikes the modern reader as odd, but was not an uncommon trope in Pushkin’s day.

I wondered whether Pushkin wrote this piece deliberately to seem unfinished, like Coleridge’s “Kubla Khan,” or whether he left it unfinished because he died or never got around to finishing it. Do you know the story on that?

Very enjoyable! I’m glad you’re back.

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Thanks so much for posting this, Carl. It's beautiful. Not knowing Russian, I can't speak to the translation, but I'm completely captivated by the language in this poem, so down-to-earth, yet so evocative; for instance, the neighbor with his hunting party--no adjectival frills; he and his friends are simply there. And in S5: I’m drawn as to a child whose family show
her no affection.
--again, such simple language creating such a strong emotional effect. I especially love the sensual language of S7. I think you've done an amazing job conveying both what Pushkin describes and his reactions.

I couldn't possibly offer any suggestions to improve this poem. All I want to do is go back and read it again and savor it.

Glenn: I think the feet in iron refers to skates.

More please, Carl.
Barbara
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Thanks, Glenn and Barbara!

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This piece is written in what seems to me to be a friendly, casual, dishabille tone, while at the same time observing strict metrical requirements.
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I'm completely captivated by the language in this poem, so down-to-earth, yet so evocative; for instance, the neighbor with his hunting party--no adjectival frills; he and his friends are simply there. And in S5: I’m drawn as to a child whose family show her no affection.--again, such simple language creating such a strong emotional effect.
You’ve both sensed Pushkin’s trademark style: clarity, elegance, concreteness, sparing use of figurative language, natural wording (at times mixed playfully with high style), sympathy for all things human and natural.

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I had difficulty understanding exactly what was happening in S3. Is the “sharp iron” referring to cleated horseshoes that are put on the horses pulling a sleigh?
He’s talking about skating, as Barbara guessed.

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I wondered whether Pushkin wrote this piece deliberately to seem unfinished, like Coleridge’s “Kubla Khan,” or whether he left it unfinished because he died or never got around to finishing it. Do you know the story on that?
The twelfth stanza was longer in an earlier draft:

Hurrah!.. Where shall we sail?... What shores
shall we now visit: the colossal Caucasus,
or the parched meadows of Moldavia,
or the wild cliffs of dreary Scotland,
or the glistening snows of Normandy,
or the pyramidal landscape of Switzerland?

But he decided against it. Michael Wachtel writes: “The title and subtitle are Pushkin’s own. He is here referring to the Romantic usage of the term ‘fragment’ as a work that is intentionally unfinished, because essentially unfinishable.” The ending is very effective as is, I think, and Pushkin did publish other “fragments,” so I’m inclined to agree. He never published this one, though, so I suppose we’ll never know.

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Not knowing Russian, I can't speak to the translation …
I never tire of saying that you don’t have to know the original language to be helpful in this forum. You don’t even have to glance at the crib. It’s a huge help to know how a translation reads as English poetry. That’s just what you’ve done.

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I especially love the sensual language of S7.
You’ve picked out the most famous stanza in a very famous poem. I recently heard my friend’s 10-year-old son memorizing those lines as a school assignment.
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This is lovely, Carl. I admire your ability to capture the effusiveness without going too over-the-top for modern tastes. The sense of the narrator's personality is clearly there, even when the first-person pronoun is not.

I found the comments on the fragmentary nature in the post above very interesting, and I hope you'll include it in your notes when it's published.
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Thanks, Julie. I’m so glad you enjoyed it. I love researching and annotating these poems. Here’s another bit of background for you: Pushkin wrote the poem at his country estate in autumn 1833 and described his daily schedule in a letter to his wife: “I wake up at seven, have coffee and lie in until three. I’ve been on a writing streak of late and have already written a ton. At three I get in the saddle, at five take a bath and then have potatoes and buckwheat for dinner. Until nine I read. That’s my day, and they’re all alike.”
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