Thanks, Jan. Your comment was helpful. I felt like the third quatrain was the weakest. I’m still not sure how to punctuate it. S3L1-2 don’t really constitute a proper sentence. I’m thinking about using a dash after “unachieved” instead of a period, but the shift in thought in the next line isn’t really pronounced enough to warrant it, and I’m afraid it might sound too “Emily Dickinson.” Any thoughts?
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