Excellent, Aaron. Thanks for posting. You make Baudelaire speak modern American.
Ann, we learned to drop the s in the possessive of polysyllabic names ending in s. That protects us from constructions like Ulysses's and Aristophanes's.
I don't know Aaron's inclinations in this, but Derek Attridge advocated scanning an "implied offbeat" between the syllables of a spondee to reflect the actual slight pause when the speaker transitions between two stressed syllables. "Rough pride" in Aaron's line could call for such an addition. For the writer to scan it that way invites the reader to add stress.
In the Helenus' line, possibly we are invited to count the caesura as a syllable.
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