Hi Carl,
Great title! I love the double-edged quality of it.
S2 does give a slightly sinister hue to the street, but I like it. It reminded me of the wild wood in Wind in the Willows. (S1 has something of that too.)
I also have to report a bit of difficulty with L5. I don't think I'm used to stressing LCD on the D. (I can do it if I try.)
SS4 & 5 have an agreeably Dickensian glow about them.
I think I like your idea of making it longer. At present something feels like it's missing between the penultimate stanza and the last.
Cheers (seasonal and otherwise)
David
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