Matt's One of Us
Matt,
I'll be lingering a while longer..
“They gave me small pieces of dried meat and berries to chew.”
Matt:
“In P2, I'm assuming he has to chew the berries.”
(I am smiling at your response to this one. I had not thought that, maybe, he was not strong enough to chew the jerky..)
Actually, I was trying to show how punctuation stiffens the delivery when it is not poetry. A professional editor once said that it is best to stick to the rules; I think doing so may help a longer piece to be consistent. But I realize that I’m no longer likely to obey the rules, unless it's about business or a legal document. In this case, it’s more about the stronger image.
It could also be:
‘They gave me berries and small pieces of dried meat to chew.”
Because chewing jerky is 'really' chewing, while most berries don’t need teeth to get mashed. This piece has more and more that I find in the Bible; it puts me to shame—me and my ignorance..
~mignon
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