[Glenn Wright]

Hi, Hilary—

I have been thinking about how to change my approach to this poem. I think that the section from S2L3 to S4L2 is the most problematic. It summarizes the events leading up to the serpents’ attack on Laocoön and his sons, but doesn’t advance my main objective. I will give some thought to introducing Medusa earlier and establishing the parallel between her and Laocoön, who are both unfairly punished by cruel, indifferent gods. I’d like to keep the terza rima, (which not only reference Vergil indirectly through Dante, but which also imitate the sinuous braiding of the serpents with the limbs of Laocoön and his sons.). An alternative would be to write a new poem on the Medusa-Laocoön parallel.

Thanks for returning and providing your useful insights.

Glenn