Hi, Alex,
I agree with most of what Julie said, especially about "gnome" and "tome." In a tightly rhymed form like the villanelle, exact rhymes that seem a bad fit for the context are likely to seem chosen for the rhyme. I think you do better with slant rhymes like "bomb" and "tomb." The problem with absurdist content in a tight form is that it feels more like an exercise than an attempt at communicating anything. I was interested in the premise of a date at a funeral home, which seemed to have opportunities for humor or awkwardness, but I don't think the poem delivered on what I was hoping for. Maybe you intended something else.
Susan
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