Thanks for your very helpful impressions, Glenn!
Draft Two posted above, to clarify some things that I don't think Draft One was conveying well, and to reassign some adjectives to other nouns in the same sentences, which is less faithful but sounds more musical.
I'm very interested to hear what the new "string of Asian beads" suggests. (I'm hoping it evokes Asian beads made of a particular substance, without spelling it out, since Rueda didn't.)
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