Thanks, Susan, for coming back and sharing your reading of the situation. That's helpful.
Thanks, Alex, for sharing what is and isn't working for you. The two possible readings of "the hurt he's done" (not necessarily mutually exclusive--but I do think one of them should predominate, as it does in the character's mind at that moment) hadn't occurred to me. I'll think about whether that can be made clearer. "The hurt he's caused" might be less susceptible to misreading, but not by much, and it feels much less direct. I'll keep thinking about this. Thank you.
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