Hi, Richard—
Nice job! I like your decision to have the N be a child. Because he expects his highly competent parents to save him from danger, he is able to give an almost relaxed account of his encounters with zombies. I also like the chapter headings.
One nit: in L14 of No Talking, you could change “in plain site” > “in plain sight.”
Suggestion for title: “The Zombie Acropolis” The N mishears his parents mention the “zombie apocalypse” and supposes that the zombies come from Ancient Greece.
Enjoyed it!
Glenn
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