Like Susan, I'd like to see the final refrain remain the same. I think it would underscore the feeling of inevitability.
I really, really love this. You've captured the void so well, throughout.
One of the things I like best is that it leaves the reader to wonder if "We meet at 12" means midnight or High Noon — both of which have multiple ominous resonances in popular culture. The ambiguity lets you exploit all of those.
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