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Unread 02-13-2025, 08:18 PM
Julie Steiner Julie Steiner is offline
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Hi, Susan! I enjoyed this.

I wonder if L1's meter could benefit from making the iambs a bit more driving:

     I'm peeling off my skin again.
or
     I've peeled away my skin again.
or
     I'm sloughing off my skin again.

vs. the double iamb of
     I have peeled off my skin again.

(Maybe I just don't like double iambs.)
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