Thanks, Marshall. I'm glad you enjoyed it; that's really all I hope for from readers.
Yes, I know the Rom dislike being called gypsies (understandably), but the title's an important link to the original ballad.
I appreciate your rhyme/meter suggestions. The three-beat line was intentional.
"Some food, and the moon rising above"--no stress on "some." Was that the problem?
"Sent the servants to search all over town." I don't stress the first two words.
Thanks!
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