I like the lineated version, minus an 'as' and 'the' here and there, and 'like' at the end of a line.
The lineated version gives a good feel to a teen's scattered ways on a bike trip, as well as the freedom. I definitely agree with the comment that falling from a bike is far from a feather-like experience. Most often it is painful, and the bike quite often topples on top of one – so most unpleasant.
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