Others, of course, are angry
that their night changed to having to hear
the wingless man singing the song
The phrasing here is still a little stiff in comparison with the clarity of the rest of the poem, John. I think by tedium you may have meant their accustomed routine. How about something like this...?
Others, of course, are angry
that their nightly routine has been changed
by the wingless man singing the song
that does not rise from where
the wide-winged loon would make its call.
Or something like that.
Good poem.
Nemo
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