Thanks Joe!
I appreciate your taking the time to get into this one and weigh in early on. The formal mechanisms are important in keeping a reader onboard with a crown, so I'm glad they're working for you here. I mercifully broke the 16 sonnet mandate.
Thanks Jim,
Glad you like it. Especially good to hear that the "tomorrow is a glass" and "all the moon can sorrow" bits aren't setting off the TILT indicator. I was drawn to them via the paradox or constraint.
I appreciate your mentioning Huncke. Writing this felt very much the way it did writing that much longer poem. It has some of the same literary reference and humor engines. Maybe less humor. I suppose there is a top layer "narrative" that can be discerned. Definitely a wasteland, including plastics, involved. Nurdles are what they call basic plastic pellets. a major pollutant in rivers near ethylene crackers. Thanks again to Joe for encouraging you to dig in!
Rick
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