[Rick Mullin]

Hi John,

I agree with Michael that, generally, there is a lack of clarity in the poem that ultimately amounts to just that. It might not hurt to define relationship, if not roles, of narrator and partner--if indeed they are not the same person.

I also agree with Julie. That line and the one about the weight of armor are a distracting contrast, despite one's ability to see its purpose.

I like the effect of turning back, nel mezzo Camm di nostra vita?, whereupon things happen or are noticed.

Rick