Yes, this is very good.
It has the odd but pleasurable feel of a repeating form such as a sestina as God cycled through. I like the rhyming.
And "nothingrose" is amazing! Working with both definitions of "rose". Then, after introducing such a word, you secure it with noone-light. Maybe you don't need the hyphen! That would be my only suggested consideration, and it's not even serious.
Rick
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