This would be better much leaner. It should be told in clearer language and more imagery. I’ve never seen a possum—I’ve never heard anyone refer to them as opossums—regardless of which is specified—build anger. I have them in my yard all the time and they instantly snarl and hiss. Their teeth aren’t the slightest bit philosophical. If you’re interested, Marosa Di Giorgio is very good with these sort of prose poems. “Diadem”is her translated selected. She’ll show you why clear and simple is best, particularly when writing on nature.
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