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Christine P'legion 08-06-2024 06:11 PM

Yellow Arrow Vignette
 
Yellow Arrow Vignette AMPLIFY has just come out, and includes a sonnet of mine: https://www.yellowarrowpublishing.co...on-pennylegion

Martin Elster 08-07-2024 10:41 AM

Congrats, Christine! Being buoyant and weightless in water is so much more enjoyable than fighting against Earth's gravity on a piano bench. The last couplet made me feel refreshed and happy. I love "Her arms were cranes / in flight, her back a pillar rising from / the sea." If you don't have the ocean, you may as well learn to swim the way Grandma did.

Susan McLean 08-07-2024 04:54 PM

Lovely.

Susan

Glenn Wright 08-07-2024 06:01 PM

Hi, Christine

Poems, particularly shorter ones like your beautiful sonnet, are like ink blot tests. They reveal to the readers much about their view of the world. As I read your poem I was sure that it would end with your grandmother sinking below the surface of the water in an explosion of bubbles. I guess I’m either a pessimist or just cynical about book learning. I like your happy ending much better than my darkly imagined horror story. Congratulations on publishing it!

Glenn

Christine P'legion 08-08-2024 08:53 AM

Glenn! That is too funny. I suppose I wouldn't be here if it had happened your way, but here's a rewritten couplet, just for you:

Quote:

One day she met the ocean, slipped inside—
Alas! the lessons didn't take. She died. :D
And thanks, Martin and Susan. I'm very pleased with how this one came out (and with Yellow Arrow's editing process; they helped me smooth out a few little things and make it a stronger poem).

Jayne Osborn 08-08-2024 11:37 AM

Congratulations, Christine. That's a lovely poem.

Jayne


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